Girl, you’ve gotta be smart about this. You’ve got to protect yourself. That’s the most important part. Don’t let down your guard until you’re okay with getting hurt. You’re going to want to let it down before that and you’re going to want to believe that you’ve found the love of your life, but don’t. Refrain. Wait it out. If it really is right, he can wait anyways.
First of all, do not go into this expecting a husband. In fact, don’t even go into this looking for a boyfriend. Forget that altogether and think about yourself. Real love is loving yourself. Be selfish, you’re too young not to. Be confident and dazzling and fun. Be whatever you want. Just don’t be whatever he wants.
Once you find him, and believe me, you will. Once you find him, don’t be afraid to let him go. There will be so many more. Honestly. Just get that through your head before getting into anything. He’s replaceable. Once you find him, put up that guard I mentioned. He’s going to tell you all kinds of wonderful things about your pretty eyes, pretty hair, nice dress, nice legs, and beautiful smile. The better the compliments the higher the level of bullshit. Don’t take it with a grain of salt, don’t take it at all. He’ll sweet talk you all night long if you let him. Don’t even waste your time.
Go for the guy who asks real questions. About your thoughts, dreams, goals, family. I’ll give you a hint; he’s not at that bar. He probably isn’t at that party either. He could be, but probably not. It’ll take time to find him.
Meanwhile, for the guy you found at the party, do whatever you want as long as you aren’t serious. Go home with him, have sex with him, whatever. If he starts using you, use him right back. Dial his ass up when you need a booty call. And when he asks you to be his girlfriend because he just realized how great you are you better say hell no. If he isn’t calling you back, forget him. Actually, there shouldn’t be any “calling back” because you shouldn’t call him at all. Let him call you. You call him back. You keep him waiting. Let him sweat it out. If he never calls, date his best friend. That’ll get his attention if that’s even what you want.
That’s what you need to focus on, what you want. If you want a hook-up, fine, go to the bar and bat your eyelashes and sway your hips and find one. If you want true love though, don’t look at all.
I was drawn in by the brunt idea of this piece and it was well-represented throughout. Some lines I liked:
ReplyDelete"Don’t let down your guard until you’re okay with getting hurt."
"Don’t take it with a grain of salt, don’t take it at all."
"Go for the guy who asks real questions."
Overall, I really liked the content, maybe expand this or separate it into different sections/scenarios/scenes? There's so much you could do with it.
But I'd say cut the "I" the third paragraph though, you only use the POV once and I found it distracting.
Also, I'm not so sure about the "summary" in the last paragraph--your piece would do fine without that.
This is a great starting point for a longer piece. I would love to see some of the situations hinted at fully unearthed.
ReplyDeleteI love this piece probably because I completely agree with everything your saying. Get out of my head! haha
ReplyDeleteBut on a revision standpoint I think you expand on certain subjects like: what type of guy, or where you might find this guy (since your not going to find him at a bar or party), also what to do while your waiting for this guy? -(Expand on loving yourself etc. )
Your introspection about letting guys come to you without the sweet talk and using guys for fun, is very interesting. It is also pretty comedic too how you talk about dating the guy's best friend and making him wait. Good advice in a funny form.
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